My classmate Alba corrected by her.

She is the person I first met the first day at the university.

For her, It´s the second year of university but in this case, in a different degree.

She is from Murcia and she already had a year of experience so she have helped a lot with the classes, the teachers and the performance.

She is always smiling and making people laugh. We are very similar but at the same time. Of what I am sure is that we connected at first sight.

Alba´s correction.

I think your text is a bit short and you can write more. You can write about your friendship with her and describe her physically, and personally. Your topic sentence is short and you must write a topic sentence that say more of the text. But your concluding sentence is very good and describes very well the text.